Laurence, Ryan, George
Strong aspects
· Good use of a range of different shots
· Appropriate music
· The slow motion scene works well.
· The shots signing the autograph work really well.
Points for improvement
Filming
· You need some more reaction shots from the guy in the wheel chair to make it feel more like a two way conversation.
· You need to keep the trimming and pace of the shots flowing smoothly and cut any of the shots that are too long.
· Consider re-shooting the main subjects mouth to get more realistic footage.
Editing
· You need to have the production company name and the names of the actors and directors.
Sound
· You might want to include hospital noises in the background to create the ambience of the environment the characters are in.
· The audio levels need to be sorted out and the music needs to start after the exam titles.
· Consider using a voiceover of the subject thinking about what is going on in their head instead of the teacher talking.
· You might want to add cheers on the playing field to create the atmosphere of a football pitch.
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