The feedback that we got from Mrs Allison was a lot of what we already knew, such as the shots on the train are unsteady, therefore we will have to re-film them, also the lip syncing on that scene isn't very effective.
A piece of feedback that we didn't already know was we needed more dramatic shots when certain parts of the song come in, such as at the start when the guitar comes in we have an over the shoulder shot, this could be a lot more interesting/dramatic.
We also need to show more skills and techniques with our filming as a lot of what we have doesn't portray a meaning. This is because the skills that we have used aren't hugely different from the work that we did at AS.
The specific points that we needed to improve are;
- The last shot, this is because the video ends in a fairly boring way.
- Needs to improve lip syncing, this is because George who is the actor, was a little unsure on the words and didn't use his mouth the emphasise the words, he also forgot to say the name of the song on the train.
- And we need to build the back story up a bit more as it is weak and doesn't give much information on what's happening and what background the man comes from.
